After looking at the feedback I tried to say "um" less which I think improved here. Also, I received good feedback from my previous pitch so I just tried to refine my pitch on this third attempt. It is definitely becoming easier to perform these elevator pitches because practice makes perfect.
Hi Ian! I really feel your pain with buses. Not only is this a problem on main roads but it is also a problem within large apartment complexes. My apartment complex is very large and there are 2 complexes on the same property. There are about 5 bus stops within this property and it is so frustrating to get stuck behind them when I am in a rush. I really hope you continue with your business plan outside of this class!
ReplyDeleteHey Ian, I really like this elevator pitch. I can definitely see the improvement in this one. I honestly could hear a single "um" in this elevator pitch and I really liked how you talked clear and concise in this video. It made everything more understandable. Overall, the elevator pitch was great and I would invest in your idea. Keep up the good work!
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